lelegai和dofast

bin

lelegai和dofast 真的好用吗，有没有用过的人跟帖说一下啊，还有，我加乐乐的QQ 怎么有被删了，我都还怎么问啊

晕蛋疯亲

没有吧，我加乐乐老师也有一段时间了，没被删呢，你干什么坏事了 - -

乐乐

QQ满了 给你留言你没有回话 就删了。。。

bin

乐乐 发表于 2013-10-29 15:51
QQ满了 给你留言你没有回话 就删了。。。

晕 我当时没看到留言。
那我在这里问你一下吧，lelegai需要花多少时间学习才能做出比较好的改写效果，还有 我能单独买lelegai吗，多少钱

搞搞阵

乐乐不会这么拒绝新客户的。

乐乐

bin 发表于 2013-10-29 15:53
晕 我当时没看到留言。
那我在这里问你一下吧，lelegai需要花多少时间学习才能做出比较好的改写效果，还 ...

核心教程有 接近15个小时，还差两集实战copyscape和实战高级改写教程在制作中
所以这里显示只有12个半小时

吸收这12个半小时教程至少需要2-3倍时间
就算3倍 36小时

改写效果，这里有一份一位兄弟学习了教程之后改写的一篇文章
426字，通过copyscape.
他花了一个多小时改写，因为是第一次改，不熟悉。（我用16刀买下了他这篇文章，所以才敢公布）
熟悉之后，特别是用高级改写方式，速度会快很多。。。

用乐乐改写方法改写质量，可以自己读读试一试。

1. When Premature babies are being transported ,they require urgently care and special attention.There are several health conditions in preemies, such as low muscle tone, breathing problems and slow heart rates and so on. Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs. Consult earnestly for your doctor first and take any workable advice that he recommends strongly so that the best method of transporting premature baby should be selected.
   
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3. Harness Height
   
4. The harness height need to be inspected When you choosing scrupulously for a premature baby's car seat,
   
5. The placement which is the safest of the shoulder straps is below or at the shoulders. The harness height should never be above shoulder level for your baby. A shoulder height below 8 inches in the car seats should be selected for preemies's Parents . This will ensure a conventionally proper fit for your small babies.
   
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7. It's the crotch strap which is on the baby car seat that should be no further than five inches from the back of the baby car seat for premature babies. it could allow room for the small baby to slump down badly which could cause unavoidably improper breathing when the crotch strap is longer. You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
   
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9. your preemie will feel secure and safe when a car seat that offers genuinely body support . Stick fast to the car seats that have built-in support as opposed firmly to buying the support cushions for baby separately. The support cushions must have passed safety regulations and are thoroughly tested with the car seat. what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car. what the rear-facing car seat recline to a 45-degree angle will keep your baby's head safe from falling forward.
   
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11. Weight Guidelines
    
12. the car seat has the suitablenbspp;weight allowance is very important when  a car seat for a preemie was selectednbspp; As usually , when the newborns weighing more than 5 pounds ,The average car seat is suitable for your baby . A car seat should be selected that will accommodate easily for your babies that are four pounds or less by premature babies's Parents. You must Make sure that baby fits within those guidelines and the car seat states the weight requirements.
    

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blackjuila

乐乐 发表于 2013-10-29 16:49
核心教程有 接近15个小时，还差两集实战copyscape和实战高级改写教程在制作中
所以这里显示只有12个半 ...

当时说买我的才5刀 辛亏没卖 不然我就亏大了

自由之路

乐乐 发表于 2013-10-29 16:49
核心教程有 接近15个小时，还差两集实战copyscape和实战高级改写教程在制作中
所以这里显示只有12个半 ...

哎，这语法怎么感觉这么乱啊

乐乐

自由之路 发表于 2013-10-29 19:09
哎，这语法怎么感觉这么乱啊

有些小语法错误 比如 when you choosing 这种，能否把觉得乱的地方指出来一两句？

自由之路

Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have is cradle the body,  反正读起来不是那么舒服，可能改写的时候太生硬了，适合外链文章。个人意见别见怪。

aicheng262

我来给你说说吧！
首先我是dofast的用户，也是乐乐改的用户。
Dofast真的是一个翻译很好的教程，看完教程+翻译工具，基本上你能翻译出，甚至是写出基本上无语法错误的句子。
关于乐乐改写，这个也是个很好的教程，首先你可以学习到改写，并且能改出很好的文章。
其次这个不单单是改写的教程，它甚至有很多方面都能延伸，至于延伸不多说，自己去延伸，嘿嘿！

乐乐

自由之路 发表于 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
Because of their tiny size, parents should choose a car seat carefully that will cater to the needs of a preemie.

学员改写：
Because of their size which are tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.

这里是我在教程中提到过，形容词变定语从句，一定要加点料，
因为是第一次改，所以他没注意，
你看，我稍微加一个单词
Because of their size which is comparatively tiny, a car seat should be chosen carefully by parents that will cater to a preemie's needs.
就自然了。

乐乐

aicheng262 发表于 2013-10-29 23:34
我来给你说说吧！
首先我是dofast的用户，也是乐乐改的用户。
Dofast真的是一个翻译很好的教程，看完教 ...

原文：
If needed, a small, rolled towel can be used to fill in any small spaces between the crotch strap and the baby to provide a snug fit.

学员改写：
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces which is small between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.

同样问题也是出在形容词转定语从句
他是看完教程第一次改写，所以这个点还没有掌握太好
乐乐改专门支持论坛，可以免费给他提供点评服务的
稍微加一点料
You can use a small, rolled towel to fill in any spaces that is not so big between the baby and the crotch strap to supply a snug fit.
就再次变得自然了

乐乐

自由之路 发表于 2013-10-29 22:42
Because of their size which are tiny,  in any spaces which is small, what baby support cushions have ...

原文：
Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the baby's head from rolling around during transport.

学员改写：
what baby support cushions have is cradle the body while supporting effectively for the baby head can keep your baby's head safe from rolling around during transport in your car.

这里属于原文稍微难一点，因为较长
A can keep B from doing C
A = Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head
B = the baby's head
doing C = rolling around during transport

但是学员思路是挺好的，我们继续按照此思路改写
What we have is the baby support cushions cradling the body that can keep the baby's head from rolling around by supporting it during transport.

这里的改写方法都是乐乐改写中提到的，这样改出的句子，可读性可以和原文对照，基本是一致的，但更核心问题是 乐乐改写方法，保护了文章内最要的东西，也就是很多自己改写时候忽略掉的。。。

a64913444

乐乐  2013.10.30我已经让楼主免费学习dofast了 如果满意 他就付费继续学习lelegai 如果不满意什么都不损失，不过希望楼主能在这里回复一下感受

那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

bin

a64913444 发表于 2013-10-30 11:44
那不是只用付lelegai呢。。

是这样的，乐乐老师昨晚说：如果我觉得满意，那么需要付1000元购买dofast和lelegai，如果不满意，则不付钱。因为昨晚有事没看，今天在单位里，等我看完后我会把感受写出来给大家看的。

coolyzb

乐乐 发表于 2013-10-30 00:20
原文：
Having baby support cushions that cradle the body while supporting the head can keep the ba ...

哈哈 原来我的错误主要是在定语从句上啊 看来要多复习复习定语从句的用法。which that what 巴拉巴拉的。。。这篇文章是我自己改写的。是看完乐乐的教程后 马上去实践操作的。。乐乐觉得我写的这篇文章 适合拿来后期的补充培训。估计我犯的错误其他人也会犯 所以就垄断了我的文章啦。。

amnoob

路过赚T币，努力赚币买外链教程。